Sunday, November 21, 2010

Alternate Ending

    The walls kept coming closer and closer until I could not stand any longer.  I begin to fall, but I happen to have time to grab onto the edge of the pit.  I try to hold on for as long as I can, but I am so tired and I still feel drugged.  I attempt to pull myself back up, but all of a sudden I starting feeling tickling and tiny pains all over my body.  There are spiders crawling all over me! They itch and hurt so badly.  I decide that dying from spider bites would be a lot more painful and torturous than falling down the pit.  I let go and all of a sudden I am falling.  My life flashes before my eyes, and the next thing I know I am in some water.  I try swimming around, but I am just to tired.  I do not think that I can avoid anymore attempts at torture so I just decide to drown myself.  I take a big inhale of breath and pass out.  Everything goes black, then suddenly I see a bright light and I realize I am dead.

1 comment:

  1. This is creepy! The spider part is gross, but it definitely adds to the story. The ending is very descriptive and very straight forward, which I think is good. Nice job!

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